Wake up!
I see the sun rise
Glittering off the sand
There are no worries in this land
I see a girl
She isn’t with a man
She reminds me of the water
Flawless outside, cold inside
I’m still gonna try an slide
Wake up!
The sun is bright
It’s noon and eighty five
Our conversation begins to thrive
I have her laughing
I never want to leave here
Everyone is filled with cheer
Wake up!
My eyes begin to flutter
Please just five minutes longer
My eyes are watering
The sun is rising
I see my room
It’s a depressing tomb
To see I’m not in Florida anymore.
cookiemonsta23 
This was really good I really liked it and I cant wait for your next post I hope they are written similar because these are very good and fun to read and I really liked how you put Wake Up! in there a few times, Keep up your fun posts cant wait. 🙂
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Reblogged this on Drifting into my world and commented:
I thought I would rebolg this because I thought that more people should read it and post a comment on this because it was so good and fun to read for me!
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I like the way that “Wake up!” is placed throughout the poem. It’s like there are the perfect amount of lines to have the reader begin to imagine the scene for a second before they’re interrupted from imagining and ‘woken up’!
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